Who Were My Parents?

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poem by me, hot off the press. and this was written from an anonymous point of veiw, so i'm not refering to my life (or who MY parents were) or anything. Any kind of comments please! What do YOU get from it? how do you like the ending?




Who Were My Parents


Who where my parents?
Were they courage? Were they strength?
Were they fear? Were they pain?
Were they sad? Were they sorry?
Who were my parents?


Were they full of color? Were they empty of sound?
Am I courage? Am I fear?
Who were my parents?


Were they fretful? Were they peace?
Were they lovers? Were they hate?
Would I know them by who I am?


Am I silence? Were they still?
Were they life? Am I there?
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[kangaroo cry]

Okay, now that you told me that thing about Poe, I definitely see it. I haven't read that specific poem you mentioned, but I read a different one (called "The Bells") and I can see the layout from that one in here a bit. But it's not like your imitating him in a bad way, yours is creative and different and still your own.

I really like this, the set up of the poem. I like questions in a poem a lot for some reason, haha. I like this concept a lot too, you know? I've found myself wondering before if I'm like I am because my parents were too. And I think the good part about this poem is that everyone can relate to it and it can be in everyone's point of view and still work.

And I can really see this in a collection of poems, amongst others. It's such a good idea!

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When I first read this, I thought of an orphan, but then as I kept reading it, I got that sort of "universal" POV image that Sarah described. I think this is wonderful BECAUSE of its relatability.

I also think this could be something like... well, I thought of a kid whose father + father's sweetheart died because of a war (like in the '40s, WWII, etc), particularly when you mentioned 'courage' (and 'silence'). Hmm, I just got such an interesting image! I imagine someone looking at old b&w photos when thinking the lines of this poem.

I think my favorite part of your poems are the diversity of imagery they create. I'm excited to read more of your poetry and take something of my own from it (if that makes sense)!